Anglais: expression écrite

Bonjour, est-ce que quelqu'un pourrait m'aider à corriger ce devoir d'expression (qui est nul d'ailleurs), à améliorer les phrases, le lexique, à trouver d'autre idée etc...
La question était à peu près (en franais): est-ce que la vie à l'école est séparée de la vie réelle ( en dehors des cours) ?

"For me, i don't consider life at school to be separate from "te real world". Scool is a life of adolescents. And they live in a real world same that they go in school. I think that school separate fromm "the real world" because it's not very different from real life.
The narrator thinks tat school is separate from "te real world" because he is in difficulties and he must go to Camp Virginia Jaycee. Indeed i think tat to live in a camp, it's different from school. The life of school isn't different from the life of an adult. They must work, earn money to live, to be intelligent, this is normal life.
The narrator with a camp has learned, has lived a good experience with Charlie.Te school is a very important moment in life because they learn, they play. The life of school isn't separate from "the real world" because in school, they are together with friends and when the school is finished, i find my family and i don't change te life to find my family.
There is single life and the "real world" is the world that you live. The real world is a life of school and the world is reality and i don't live in dreams. The life of school is not a dream, it is real life."

Je mets une petite condition, est-ce que vous pourrez recopier entièrement le texte corigé. Merci d'avance

Salut,

je veux bien essayer mais je n'ai pas un très bon niveau en anglais

19-02-2007 à 09:51, Pierrot82 :

La question était à peu près (en franais): est-ce que la vie à l'école est séparée de la vie réelle ( en dehors des cours) ?

"According to me, I don't consider life at school to be separated from "the real world". School is the life of the most of the teenagers and they live in a real world when they go to school ; they spend the most part of their time in this place. I think that school isn't separated from "the real world" because it's not very different from real life.
The narrator thinks that school is separated from "te real world" because he is in difficulties and he must go to Camp Virginia Jaycee. Indeed, I think that to live in a camp, it's different from school. The life of school isn't different from the life of an adult. They must work, earn money to live, to be intelligent, this is normal life.
With a camp, the narrator has learned, has lived a good experience with Charlie. The school is a very important moment in they life because we learn, we play. The life of school isn't separated from "the real world" because in school, we are together with friends and when the school is finished, we join up with our family and we needn't to change the life to find our family.
There is single life and the "real world" is the world where we live. The real world is the life at school and the world is reality and we don't live in dreams. The life of school is not a dream, it is real life."

Faudrait trouver des synonymes de "live" et "life" qui reviennent trop souvent.


[ Ce message a été modifié par : : Pangolina le 19-02-2007 12:55 ]